I love the theme of your Storybook! Badass Biblical Women - LOVE IT! I also enjoyed your Drake comment on your home page! It made me laugh! Your header is also very intriguing!
Your introduction did a fantastic job of explaining the purpose of your story book and what you plan to do with it! I think this is a fantastic idea! You have lots of options! I am looking forwarding to reading biblical stories from females point of view! I think a fun one to right would be David and Bathsheba from her perspective! Whichever stories you choose to write, I know I am going to love them! I look forward to learning from your stories, and maybe even gaining some insight for my own faith of certain traits biblical women should obtain.
As you continue to write stories, do you plan on updating your introduction with a blurb about each story like you have done with Judith? I think that is a great way to help your audience understand your stories!
Hey Amanda! I love this story idea! I think it's going to be really good just based off your introduction, and I am excited to see what you have in store with Judith! I'm hoping she is the one who beheads kings! I remember being younger and hearing all these stories about women who loved to serve their men and all they did was traditional things like cook and clean and being so bored by it all. But then hearing stories of women like Deborah who is still the only female judge or the woman who (I forgot her name) drove a tent peg through a man's head! That was more like it for me! I definitely agree there are some badass women in the bible, and I think it would be really cool too if in your introduction you listed all the women you are going to write about, not just Judith!
Hey Amanda! I love the layout of your storybook! It looks great so far and your images are very powerful! At the bottom of your home page it says "There's nothing here!" at the bottom, I think it's just the formatting of the website but it looks like it's part of your story right now and could be confusing! You do a great job at introducing exactly what you're going to be talking about and what stories you'll be telling! I have a very clear idea as to what I can expect from this storybook. You picked a very interesting topic as well! I don't know a lot about biblical women so I'm excited for the chance to learn something new! There's just one little typo that I see; you repeated "common" in the second sentence. I know you said you were more of a historical writer rather than a creative fiction writer so, as a creative fiction writer, I'm really interested to see how your stories will play out! I can't wait to see what you write next!
Hello, Amanda! I just got done looking through your story-book and it looks like it is coming a long nicely! Since I also grew up christian I think that your topic will be very interesting. I really look forward to seeing your perspective and retelling of these stories! So I really like how your introduction gives a glimpse into what your storybook will cover, how you chose the topic, and what is yet to come. I liked the format of your portfolio but was wondering if the font was the same under the title as it was everywhere else. Also, you did a great job of choosing a powerful image, but what if you found another one for the second page. Maybe this could be our first look at Judith rather than it being on the first page as well. Either way it is an interesting image that fits perfectly with your theme of bad ass women! Best of luck!
Hey Amanda! Just read your introduction and it seems as though the story will definitely be an interesting one. I have never really known much about any of the tales or the women that you are writing about, I can see that their stories will definitely be interesting ones. I really like the layout of your storybook and the picture you chose for your introduction. I felt like the picture really connected with the story you are going to tell about Judith. I am really interested to see what stories you'll write to paint the picture of Badass Biblical Women.
Hey Amanda. Great introduction on your project. I cannot wait to read the stories for the badass women of the Bible. It would be helpful to put the link to your comments page on the Home page of your project. It just makes it easier to get between the two. You have a couple of small grammatical errors that made the start a little hard to get though. In the first paragraph, you repeated the word “common” twice. The second and third sentences are very lengthy. It would be helpful to break them up into smaller sentences so that readers can understand the content easier. Other than that, the introduction read very well. I had not read the Women of the Bible readings and look forward to hearing about Judith’s story and the other women. I was not aware that some stories had been taken from the bible. You did a great job of explaining why certain stories were taken out in your notes at the bottom. I will defiantly be checking back to read your future stories in your project.
Hey, Amanda! I really like the idea of using both biblical and non-biblical sources. I think a lot of people, particularly those with Christian backgrounds, tend to think that if a source is not in the orthodox canon, then it possesses no truth. Though these documents may not be considered orthodox, this does not mean that they completely lack accurate historical information. Great job on including these as well! You do a good job of explaining the vision for your project. It might help your audience to have a more specific overview, especially regarding the characters and why you are including them. Perhaps this is a section that you could add into your introduction, with a brief explanation of each of the characters that you are writing about as well as your motivation for including those specific women. Are there any specific themes that you will be looking for ahead of time, or are you just choosing some of your favorite characters to discuss? Do you have any guesses as to how women in the Bible will differ from women in other sources from the same time period? Maybe in these stories, you will be able to creatively explore the historical context while also incorporating some essential ideas of what it means to be a Christian woman.
I just got done reading your Introduction, and I have to say that I am really excited to how your StoryBook will turn out! To start off, even before diving into the actual subject, I think it is awesome that you pointed out that you are not that great of a creative writer. We all have our strengths and weaknessess; it is good that you are able to identify what your weakness is and prioritize your efforts in your strengths, in this case: your ability to write about the historical backgrounds of the story. Keep with this plan and you should do more than fine!
As for your actual subject, I think it will be really cool to read about unknown, badass women of the Bible. I also like that you are not just limiting yourself by just FINDING existing women, but that you are willing to modify known stories to show just how badass the women in the stories are.
My suggestion for you is this: don't be afraid to try to be creative. When you are brainstorming, just write what comes to mind and roll with it! You'll be surprised to see how easily things start to flow when you let it. If you don't like the result, try again or stick with your original script of keeping with facts!
Hi Amanda! Wow, your project is so interesting!! I can't wait to read more! I have a strong Christian background too. I can't wait to hear how you retell these stories! I think I'm most interested in the ones that you change from a male perspective to a female's. The first woman you mentioned definitely threw me off! I've never heard of Judith before. This was an actual thing!? Woahh! I love that I'm already learning from your project! Yeah, she's very different from the other women in the Bible. Maybe you could also include the other woman you plan to include in your introduction to give it a more complete feel! I'd really like to hear the story of Abraham and Sarah from Sarah's perspective. What did she think when Abraham took their son away? But, that's just a suggestion! This is a fantastic introduction to Judith though! I really look forward to reading more of this project as it grows!
I heard a rumor that you were in this class and it looks like that was true. I am glad we were allowed to go look at some of the Myth and Folklore stories so that I had the opportunity to look at yours. And boy am I so glad that I did! I loved reading through everything you came up with. Your introduction seemed to cover enough without giving away too many details. It also made me laugh several different times! Your theme, while hilarious (I mean come on, “Badass Biblical Women”), is one that is also very informational. I am all about learning more about the women from that time because I agree that they often are not given enough credit! It is cool to see a story that is really centered on the woman. Although tragic, your story of Bathsheba was really great. It was so well written and I felt engaged the entire time. You were able to paint a really great picture! Way to go Amanda! I can’t wait to read more. ☺
This is my first time to read some Myth and Folklore stories this semester, and your title immediately stuck out to me. I love researching women of the Bible, and so many of them are strong and fight for themselves and what they believe in. First of all, the design of your blog goes really well with your images; it is simple and clean so the artwork really is eye-catching. I would add a link to your comment wall on your home page, but I don't see anything that needs to be changed other than that. You introduction was well-written, and it gave good insight about your stories and what to expect. The Bathsheba story was AWESOME! King David is one of my favorite characters in the Bible, and the way you depicted Bathsheba in this story was both humorous and very appealing. The dialogue made the characters relatable and realistic, and I felt like I was in the midst of what was happening. I will definitely keep up with the rest of your stories. A female's perspective of Biblical stories is definitely needed!
Hey Amanda! I'm from the Indian Epics course! I think your choice of topic for your storybook is super interesting! I grew up in church myself, so I'm mostly familiar with the source material. Your introduction was extremely helpful in setting up your stories and getting the readers excited and prepared for an adventure! I like how you told us exactly which women you would be focusing on, and I have to agree with your selection. I'm so glad you gave some insight into how Bathsheba felt during that time. You portrayed her uncertainty and sadness very well, and you made her a much more sympathetic character than I think the Bible makes her. Kind David's cool and all, but he wasn't perfect, and I'm glad you gave that imperfection the critical eye it needed. The only errors I noticed were that you spelled the main title "Baddass," but you have it spelled correctly through the rest of your intro, and then once you say "women" when it should be "woman."
Hey Amanda! What an awesome storybook you have so far. Your home page really grabs the attention of the reader right off the bat, especially with the picture. Then, your introduction does a great job of explaining some background information for your storybook, and describes just how you are going to incorporate your own flare into these stories. I think the personal connection of your own Christian background is a great inspiration and makes me more interested to read your take on these stories. The first story of Bathsheba was really cool and I liked how you gave her a voice. I also liked the commentary because it added great texture to the storyline. I think overall, the layout of your project is really visually appealing and very organized. If there were one suggestion I could make, it would be to add a few more pictures. They just do a great job of aiding the reader in seeing exactly what you are trying to write. Anyways, thanks for sharing and keep up the great work!
Hi Amada! Wow, I loved your concept! Your home page was the best! Haha. I loved how you explained your thoughts with words from Drake. I did wonder about the navigation of the storybook. It was a little confusing to follow for. What if you made it a little simpler? You could maybe choose a different theme? Other than that, I loved the pictures you picked, and how you made the homepage and introduction simple and easy to understand! Great work! My favorite about “Bathsheba” was how you explained that a bath is a luxury, and the woman in your story was a big deal because she had this luxury. I also liked the drama! It felt like a tv series. Haha. I think you did a great job writing the story, and I look forward to reading more of what you come up with! You definitely caught my attention with your storybook!
Hi Amanda! I really love how you are taking time to recognize strong women in the Bible that sometimes in my opinion get forgotten about. I really like what you said in your author's note about if Bathsheba had refused to the king summoning her that she would have probably faced an even greater punishment. It is a bit frustrating that women have to oblige to what a man says especially a powerful one even though they know that it is wrong. In the end Bathsheba was punished for something that she did not want to partake in. It makes me sad that women were terrified by what would happen if they did not oblige the king and sleep with him. Good job!
Hi Amanda, me again! I am still loving your theme for your story book! The small revisions to your introduction look great! I was excited to revisit your page to see what you have done and I was excited to see that there is a story focusing on Bathesheba! A suggestion I have is to change the format of your picture, for it is very close to your first paragraph. Maybe put in below or above the paragraph rather than out to the side. I enjoyed reading this story, and after reading your author's note about your take on it, I reread it to see the elements that you wanted to focus on such as the refusal of the king and Bathsheba being an object of lust. You did an excellent job of executing your thoughts in this story and I look forward to reading more about Badass Biblical women!
It is funny that I came upon your Storybook, because my grandfather and I were talking about women in the Bible just the other day! He didn't think there were many women besides Mary and Eve, and since I had read about them during the week of class when we could read about the BIble, I knew more. Great choice! Not only that, but I'm so glad that you wrote about the story of Judith! She is one of my favorite women in literature and I'm glad that someone is recognized her badass-ery!
My one suggestion is to try and add more dialogue to the story of Judith. Dialogue makes the reader feel closer to the story, and it also provides a better sense of character for the speaker. You did really well with dialogue in the story of Bathsheba, and I was looking forward to it in the story of Judith, and was almost disappointed (almost, but not quite).
Hi Amanda! Right off, I thought your title and your little subhead referencing Drake was super funny. I believe you've misspelled "badass" in your title though, so I'd fix that so as not to distract readers. Also, on the homepage, there's a little note that says "There's nothing here!" at the end of the page, so you may want to try to get rid of that. There are also a few times in the introduction where you use "Women" instead of "Woman," so I'd run through that post again and just keep an eye out for that. Also, the story of Bathsheba is wild — I'm not familiar with the Biblical story, but from what I can tell, you've stayed pretty true to the real story while highlighting some of the craziest parts of it. I thought your use of dialogue was really successful in that story in particular, and I think a bit more dialogue in your story about Judith would help a lot! Overall, I think this is a really cool storybook idea and I think you've executed it nicely. I didn't know a lot about these Biblical women! Great job.
Hi Amanda! First, I would like to say that I genuinely laughed when I read the “Immortal Words of Drake.” After reading this I knew I would enjoy this storybook. Also, the website is really easy to navigate which I appreciate. I like the concept of this storybook and the reasoning behind it. The most memorable part of this entire storybook is when you are explaining what a Badass Biblical Woman is in your introduction. I like how you chose to highlight female characters from the Bible who are complex. It’s a refreshing change to see this because I feel like a lot of people only talk about the characters who were the toughest or the prettiest. The main question I had about the Bathsheba story is why you didn’t make her stand up for herself a little. I know that it would have been impossible for her to do that back then, but I think adding this to the story would have helped add to her character in the story.
Hi Amanda! I really loved reading through your project. I thought the theme was awesome and I enjoyed which women you chose to highlight. I especially liked your story about Bathsheba because she is such a complicated women. Her story is so well known but very little is known about her character. I had never read Judith's story before but I really enjoyed your story. Since Judith's story isn't as well known you might consider giving a little more backstory either in the story or in the author's note. For example I wouldn't have known that Judith was good with a sword or that she was going to behead the king until I read the author's note. Also you have a sentence where you say that Judith is still very pleasing "to the high" and I think you meant eye. Otherwise I thought your stories were excellent and really enjoyed your project! Well Done!
Hey Amanada, I had read you project awhile back when you only had the introduction completed but I wanted to come back and read the tales of the Baddass Biblical Women. I really enjoyed your perception of Bathsheba tale and that she was not willing to be with the King but knew she had to say yes to him because of the era. Even though this is not in the Biblical version it seems like a more accurate depiction of what happened because rape culture was not recognized back in that era. I also really enjoyed your story of Judith. I like at the end of the story how she is confused by men putting so much credit in a woman that is beautiful. I think this is still something that could be said for how men act today. There are even studies over woman that have “beautiful features” receiving better jobs and pay compared to woman that are considered “plain”. Great writing and great stories, I hope you get to add the story of Ruth too!
Hey Amanda, I really enjoyed your unique perspective and ideas on this subject. I also grew up in a Christian house and so these stories are not new to me. I always wondered why women weren’t shown more in the bible and so I appreciate all the spotlight on them this time around. I think the three women that you chose were great choices to give a broad spectrum of the women in the bible. My favorite part about the whole story book is the title. I think that the fact that you have taken a stereotype of not being able to cuss as a Christian and shattered those walls. As a Christian I appreciate that so much. To me there is power in words and if you don’t give words a negative power then there should be no problem with expressing yourself. Overall, you did a great job! Keep writing!
Hello Amanda! I love your idea to study the women in the bible in more depth. They are truly remarkable women. Your story of Bathsheba was very eye-opening. When reading the actual story, one focus's on David more than Bathsheba. Considering her point of view is unique. She is required to be complaint, because he is a King. However, she harbors resentment for her father's death, and now the death of her husband. Judith is not a story that I have read many times before. Revealing her frustrations, doubts, and fears better rounds out the story and makes her more relatable. Her taking offense at the notion of not being perceived as a threat made me smile. Ruth is always an interesting character to read about. She gains confidence over the course of the story. I like how you emphasize her bravery to do things that she isn't comfortable doing. I agree that stopping the story when you did was a good choice, because it focus's on Ruth and her decision rather than Boaz and his.
I think your idea to study the women of the bible is a great story topic and I loved what I got to read. I first off was drawn to your story book because of the title as I thought that was a funny way to describe the women of the bible. I am glad I got to read some of this classes stories as I am from the indian epics class and it is good to get to read some from a different side of the class. One of my favorite stories is the one of Ruth as I loved how she became braver as the story went along and was able to branch out of her comfort zone a little. In those times that was so hard for women and it shows how badass she really was. Great job on your story and so glad I got to see a little bit of it from the other side.
I am so glad that I got to come back to your storybook and read more of the project. I really enjoyed the addition of the Ruth story from the last time I read through your project. Ruth is one of my favorite biblical women and you really captured the quiet determination that made her so extraordinary. I also really liked that you made the emphasis on Ruth's internal decisions rather than the external actions that anyone who had ever heard the story before would know about. While reading through I did notice a couple of grammar errors that you can fix. There is an inconstancy in the way you spell Ruth's first husband's name (Killion versus Killian). Additionally you write "Where you die I will die and there I will b buried." b should be changed to be. Otherwise everything looked awesome and your story was so fun and well written. Good job and I'm glad I got to read through your newest story!
I loved your story book and how it all turned out as the semester finished up and everything! I think I read the first story you posted way back at the beginning of the semester and I’m glad I could come back now that you’ve added the rest of them! I love the concept and how you showed those different types of power that women in the bible had. I think it’s important to showcase more than one way a woman can be powerful and independent. I especially liked your story about Ruth, because it was definitely a different kind of confidence that gets skipped over a lot when talking about powerful women. Overall, I think you did a great job with this whole project and I’m happy I got to check back in at the end and read the rest of your stories! They were so good!
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ReplyDeleteI love the theme of your Storybook! Badass Biblical Women - LOVE IT! I also enjoyed your Drake comment on your home page! It made me laugh! Your header is also very intriguing!
Your introduction did a fantastic job of explaining the purpose of your story book and what you plan to do with it! I think this is a fantastic idea! You have lots of options! I am looking forwarding to reading biblical stories from females point of view! I think a fun one to right would be David and Bathsheba from her perspective! Whichever stories you choose to write, I know I am going to love them! I look forward to learning from your stories, and maybe even gaining some insight for my own faith of certain traits biblical women should obtain.
As you continue to write stories, do you plan on updating your introduction with a blurb about each story like you have done with Judith? I think that is a great way to help your audience understand your stories!
Hey Amanda! I love this story idea! I think it's going to be really good just based off your introduction, and I am excited to see what you have in store with Judith! I'm hoping she is the one who beheads kings! I remember being younger and hearing all these stories about women who loved to serve their men and all they did was traditional things like cook and clean and being so bored by it all. But then hearing stories of women like Deborah who is still the only female judge or the woman who (I forgot her name) drove a tent peg through a man's head! That was more like it for me! I definitely agree there are some badass women in the bible, and I think it would be really cool too if in your introduction you listed all the women you are going to write about, not just Judith!
ReplyDeleteHey Amanda! I love the layout of your storybook! It looks great so far and your images are very powerful! At the bottom of your home page it says "There's nothing here!" at the bottom, I think it's just the formatting of the website but it looks like it's part of your story right now and could be confusing!
ReplyDeleteYou do a great job at introducing exactly what you're going to be talking about and what stories you'll be telling! I have a very clear idea as to what I can expect from this storybook. You picked a very interesting topic as well! I don't know a lot about biblical women so I'm excited for the chance to learn something new!
There's just one little typo that I see; you repeated "common" in the second sentence.
I know you said you were more of a historical writer rather than a creative fiction writer so, as a creative fiction writer, I'm really interested to see how your stories will play out!
I can't wait to see what you write next!
Hello, Amanda! I just got done looking through your story-book and it looks like it is coming a long nicely! Since I also grew up christian I think that your topic will be very interesting. I really look forward to seeing your perspective and retelling of these stories!
ReplyDeleteSo I really like how your introduction gives a glimpse into what your storybook will cover, how you chose the topic, and what is yet to come. I liked the format of your portfolio but was wondering if the font was the same under the title as it was everywhere else. Also, you did a great job of choosing a powerful image, but what if you found another one for the second page. Maybe this could be our first look at Judith rather than it being on the first page as well. Either way it is an interesting image that fits perfectly with your theme of bad ass women! Best of luck!
Hey Amanda! Just read your introduction and it seems as though the story will definitely be an interesting one. I have never really known much about any of the tales or the women that you are writing about, I can see that their stories will definitely be interesting ones. I really like the layout of your storybook and the picture you chose for your introduction. I felt like the picture really connected with the story you are going to tell about Judith. I am really interested to see what stories you'll write to paint the picture of Badass Biblical Women.
ReplyDeleteHey Amanda. Great introduction on your project. I cannot wait to read the stories for the badass women of the Bible. It would be helpful to put the link to your comments page on the Home page of your project. It just makes it easier to get between the two. You have a couple of small grammatical errors that made the start a little hard to get though. In the first paragraph, you repeated the word “common” twice. The second and third sentences are very lengthy. It would be helpful to break them up into smaller sentences so that readers can understand the content easier. Other than that, the introduction read very well. I had not read the Women of the Bible readings and look forward to hearing about Judith’s story and the other women. I was not aware that some stories had been taken from the bible. You did a great job of explaining why certain stories were taken out in your notes at the bottom. I will defiantly be checking back to read your future stories in your project.
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ReplyDeleteI really like the idea of using both biblical and non-biblical sources. I think a lot of people, particularly those with Christian backgrounds, tend to think that if a source is not in the orthodox canon, then it possesses no truth. Though these documents may not be considered orthodox, this does not mean that they completely lack accurate historical information. Great job on including these as well!
You do a good job of explaining the vision for your project. It might help your audience to have a more specific overview, especially regarding the characters and why you are including them. Perhaps this is a section that you could add into your introduction, with a brief explanation of each of the characters that you are writing about as well as your motivation for including those specific women. Are there any specific themes that you will be looking for ahead of time, or are you just choosing some of your favorite characters to discuss? Do you have any guesses as to how women in the Bible will differ from women in other sources from the same time period? Maybe in these stories, you will be able to creatively explore the historical context while also incorporating some essential ideas of what it means to be a Christian woman.
Hey Amanda,
ReplyDeleteI just got done reading your Introduction, and I have to say that I am really excited to how your StoryBook will turn out! To start off, even before diving into the actual subject, I think it is awesome that you pointed out that you are not that great of a creative writer. We all have our strengths and weaknessess; it is good that you are able to identify what your weakness is and prioritize your efforts in your strengths, in this case: your ability to write about the historical backgrounds of the story. Keep with this plan and you should do more than fine!
As for your actual subject, I think it will be really cool to read about unknown, badass women of the Bible. I also like that you are not just limiting yourself by just FINDING existing women, but that you are willing to modify known stories to show just how badass the women in the stories are.
My suggestion for you is this: don't be afraid to try to be creative. When you are brainstorming, just write what comes to mind and roll with it! You'll be surprised to see how easily things start to flow when you let it. If you don't like the result, try again or stick with your original script of keeping with facts!
Good luck!
Hi Amanda! Wow, your project is so interesting!! I can't wait to read more! I have a strong Christian background too. I can't wait to hear how you retell these stories! I think I'm most interested in the ones that you change from a male perspective to a female's. The first woman you mentioned definitely threw me off! I've never heard of Judith before. This was an actual thing!? Woahh! I love that I'm already learning from your project! Yeah, she's very different from the other women in the Bible. Maybe you could also include the other woman you plan to include in your introduction to give it a more complete feel! I'd really like to hear the story of Abraham and Sarah from Sarah's perspective. What did she think when Abraham took their son away? But, that's just a suggestion! This is a fantastic introduction to Judith though! I really look forward to reading more of this project as it grows!
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ReplyDeleteI heard a rumor that you were in this class and it looks like that was true. I am glad we were allowed to go look at some of the Myth and Folklore stories so that I had the opportunity to look at yours. And boy am I so glad that I did! I loved reading through everything you came up with. Your introduction seemed to cover enough without giving away too many details. It also made me laugh several different times! Your theme, while hilarious (I mean come on, “Badass Biblical Women”), is one that is also very informational. I am all about learning more about the women from that time because I agree that they often are not given enough credit! It is cool to see a story that is really centered on the woman. Although tragic, your story of Bathsheba was really great. It was so well written and I felt engaged the entire time. You were able to paint a really great picture! Way to go Amanda! I can’t wait to read more. ☺
Hey Amanda!
ReplyDeleteThis is my first time to read some Myth and Folklore stories this semester, and your title immediately stuck out to me. I love researching women of the Bible, and so many of them are strong and fight for themselves and what they believe in. First of all, the design of your blog goes really well with your images; it is simple and clean so the artwork really is eye-catching. I would add a link to your comment wall on your home page, but I don't see anything that needs to be changed other than that. You introduction was well-written, and it gave good insight about your stories and what to expect.
The Bathsheba story was AWESOME! King David is one of my favorite characters in the Bible, and the way you depicted Bathsheba in this story was both humorous and very appealing. The dialogue made the characters relatable and realistic, and I felt like I was in the midst of what was happening. I will definitely keep up with the rest of your stories. A female's perspective of Biblical stories is definitely needed!
Hey Amanda! I'm from the Indian Epics course! I think your choice of topic for your storybook is super interesting! I grew up in church myself, so I'm mostly familiar with the source material. Your introduction was extremely helpful in setting up your stories and getting the readers excited and prepared for an adventure! I like how you told us exactly which women you would be focusing on, and I have to agree with your selection.
ReplyDeleteI'm so glad you gave some insight into how Bathsheba felt during that time. You portrayed her uncertainty and sadness very well, and you made her a much more sympathetic character than I think the Bible makes her. Kind David's cool and all, but he wasn't perfect, and I'm glad you gave that imperfection the critical eye it needed. The only errors I noticed were that you spelled the main title "Baddass," but you have it spelled correctly through the rest of your intro, and then once you say "women" when it should be "woman."
Hey Amanda! What an awesome storybook you have so far. Your home page really grabs the attention of the reader right off the bat, especially with the picture. Then, your introduction does a great job of explaining some background information for your storybook, and describes just how you are going to incorporate your own flare into these stories. I think the personal connection of your own Christian background is a great inspiration and makes me more interested to read your take on these stories. The first story of Bathsheba was really cool and I liked how you gave her a voice. I also liked the commentary because it added great texture to the storyline. I think overall, the layout of your project is really visually appealing and very organized. If there were one suggestion I could make, it would be to add a few more pictures. They just do a great job of aiding the reader in seeing exactly what you are trying to write. Anyways, thanks for sharing and keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteHi Amada! Wow, I loved your concept! Your home page was the best! Haha. I loved how you explained your thoughts with words from Drake. I did wonder about the navigation of the storybook. It was a little confusing to follow for. What if you made it a little simpler? You could maybe choose a different theme? Other than that, I loved the pictures you picked, and how you made the homepage and introduction simple and easy to understand! Great work! My favorite about “Bathsheba” was how you explained that a bath is a luxury, and the woman in your story was a big deal because she had this luxury. I also liked the drama! It felt like a tv series. Haha. I think you did a great job writing the story, and I look forward to reading more of what you come up with! You definitely caught my attention with your storybook!
ReplyDeleteHi Amanda! I really love how you are taking time to recognize strong women in the Bible that sometimes in my opinion get forgotten about. I really like what you said in your author's note about if Bathsheba had refused to the king summoning her that she would have probably faced an even greater punishment. It is a bit frustrating that women have to oblige to what a man says especially a powerful one even though they know that it is wrong. In the end Bathsheba was punished for something that she did not want to partake in. It makes me sad that women were terrified by what would happen if they did not oblige the king and sleep with him.
ReplyDeleteGood job!
Hi Amanda, me again!
ReplyDeleteI am still loving your theme for your story book! The small revisions to your introduction look great! I was excited to revisit your page to see what you have done and I was excited to see that there is a story focusing on Bathesheba! A suggestion I have is to change the format of your picture, for it is very close to your first paragraph. Maybe put in below or above the paragraph rather than out to the side. I enjoyed reading this story, and after reading your author's note about your take on it, I reread it to see the elements that you wanted to focus on such as the refusal of the king and Bathsheba being an object of lust. You did an excellent job of executing your thoughts in this story and I look forward to reading more about Badass Biblical women!
Amanda,
ReplyDeleteIt is funny that I came upon your Storybook, because my grandfather and I were talking about women in the Bible just the other day! He didn't think there were many women besides Mary and Eve, and since I had read about them during the week of class when we could read about the BIble, I knew more. Great choice! Not only that, but I'm so glad that you wrote about the story of Judith! She is one of my favorite women in literature and I'm glad that someone is recognized her badass-ery!
My one suggestion is to try and add more dialogue to the story of Judith. Dialogue makes the reader feel closer to the story, and it also provides a better sense of character for the speaker. You did really well with dialogue in the story of Bathsheba, and I was looking forward to it in the story of Judith, and was almost disappointed (almost, but not quite).
Either way, your Storybook is great! Keep it up!
Hi Amanda! Right off, I thought your title and your little subhead referencing Drake was super funny. I believe you've misspelled "badass" in your title though, so I'd fix that so as not to distract readers. Also, on the homepage, there's a little note that says "There's nothing here!" at the end of the page, so you may want to try to get rid of that. There are also a few times in the introduction where you use "Women" instead of "Woman," so I'd run through that post again and just keep an eye out for that. Also, the story of Bathsheba is wild — I'm not familiar with the Biblical story, but from what I can tell, you've stayed pretty true to the real story while highlighting some of the craziest parts of it. I thought your use of dialogue was really successful in that story in particular, and I think a bit more dialogue in your story about Judith would help a lot! Overall, I think this is a really cool storybook idea and I think you've executed it nicely. I didn't know a lot about these Biblical women! Great job.
ReplyDeleteHi Amanda! First, I would like to say that I genuinely laughed when I read the “Immortal Words of Drake.” After reading this I knew I would enjoy this storybook. Also, the website is really easy to navigate which I appreciate. I like the concept of this storybook and the reasoning behind it. The most memorable part of this entire storybook is when you are explaining what a Badass Biblical Woman is in your introduction. I like how you chose to highlight female characters from the Bible who are complex. It’s a refreshing change to see this because I feel like a lot of people only talk about the characters who were the toughest or the prettiest. The main question I had about the Bathsheba story is why you didn’t make her stand up for herself a little. I know that it would have been impossible for her to do that back then, but I think adding this to the story would have helped add to her character in the story.
ReplyDeleteHi Amanda!
ReplyDeleteI really loved reading through your project. I thought the theme was awesome and I enjoyed which women you chose to highlight. I especially liked your story about Bathsheba because she is such a complicated women. Her story is so well known but very little is known about her character. I had never read Judith's story before but I really enjoyed your story. Since Judith's story isn't as well known you might consider giving a little more backstory either in the story or in the author's note. For example I wouldn't have known that Judith was good with a sword or that she was going to behead the king until I read the author's note. Also you have a sentence where you say that Judith is still very pleasing "to the high" and I think you meant eye. Otherwise I thought your stories were excellent and really enjoyed your project! Well Done!
-Elizabeth
Hey Amanada,
ReplyDeleteI had read you project awhile back when you only had the introduction completed but I wanted to come back and read the tales of the Baddass Biblical Women. I really enjoyed your perception of Bathsheba tale and that she was not willing to be with the King but knew she had to say yes to him because of the era. Even though this is not in the Biblical version it seems like a more accurate depiction of what happened because rape culture was not recognized back in that era. I also really enjoyed your story of Judith. I like at the end of the story how she is confused by men putting so much credit in a woman that is beautiful. I think this is still something that could be said for how men act today. There are even studies over woman that have “beautiful features” receiving better jobs and pay compared to woman that are considered “plain”. Great writing and great stories, I hope you get to add the story of Ruth too!
Hey Amanda,
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your unique perspective and ideas on this subject. I also grew up in a Christian house and so these stories are not new to me. I always wondered why women weren’t shown more in the bible and so I appreciate all the spotlight on them this time around. I think the three women that you chose were great choices to give a broad spectrum of the women in the bible. My favorite part about the whole story book is the title. I think that the fact that you have taken a stereotype of not being able to cuss as a Christian and shattered those walls. As a Christian I appreciate that so much. To me there is power in words and if you don’t give words a negative power then there should be no problem with expressing yourself. Overall, you did a great job! Keep writing!
Hello Amanda!
ReplyDeleteI love your idea to study the women in the bible in more depth. They are truly remarkable women.
Your story of Bathsheba was very eye-opening. When reading the actual story, one focus's on David more than Bathsheba. Considering her point of view is unique. She is required to be complaint, because he is a King. However, she harbors resentment for her father's death, and now the death of her husband.
Judith is not a story that I have read many times before. Revealing her frustrations, doubts, and fears better rounds out the story and makes her more relatable. Her taking offense at the notion of not being perceived as a threat made me smile.
Ruth is always an interesting character to read about. She gains confidence over the course of the story. I like how you emphasize her bravery to do things that she isn't comfortable doing. I agree that stopping the story when you did was a good choice, because it focus's on Ruth and her decision rather than Boaz and his.
Amanda,
ReplyDeleteI think your idea to study the women of the bible is a great story topic and I loved what I got to read. I first off was drawn to your story book because of the title as I thought that was a funny way to describe the women of the bible. I am glad I got to read some of this classes stories as I am from the indian epics class and it is good to get to read some from a different side of the class. One of my favorite stories is the one of Ruth as I loved how she became braver as the story went along and was able to branch out of her comfort zone a little. In those times that was so hard for women and it shows how badass she really was. Great job on your story and so glad I got to see a little bit of it from the other side.
Hey Amanda!
ReplyDeleteI am so glad that I got to come back to your storybook and read more of the project. I really enjoyed the addition of the Ruth story from the last time I read through your project. Ruth is one of my favorite biblical women and you really captured the quiet determination that made her so extraordinary. I also really liked that you made the emphasis on Ruth's internal decisions rather than the external actions that anyone who had ever heard the story before would know about. While reading through I did notice a couple of grammar errors that you can fix. There is an inconstancy in the way you spell Ruth's first husband's name (Killion versus Killian). Additionally you write "Where you die I will die and there I will b buried." b should be changed to be. Otherwise everything looked awesome and your story was so fun and well written. Good job and I'm glad I got to read through your newest story!
-Elizabeth
Hi Amanda!
ReplyDeleteI loved your story book and how it all turned out as the semester finished up and everything! I think I read the first story you posted way back at the beginning of the semester and I’m glad I could come back now that you’ve added the rest of them! I love the concept and how you showed those different types of power that women in the bible had. I think it’s important to showcase more than one way a woman can be powerful and independent. I especially liked your story about Ruth, because it was definitely a different kind of confidence that gets skipped over a lot when talking about powerful women. Overall, I think you did a great job with this whole project and I’m happy I got to check back in at the end and read the rest of your stories! They were so good!